My version of Sonnet 18 - Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?

Shall I compare thee to a summer's day ?
For you are more lovely and more temperate.
I would love to shake your darling buds if I may?

As summer's here,so do you fancy a date?
Sometimes I get so hot that your heavenly eyes shine,
and I often see that your tanned complexion looks more dimmed
and so my love for you sometimes declines,
but by a chance, or nature's changing course, lies untrimmed
But my memory of our summer will never fade,
and I won't lose the memories of how fair you are
and death shall not boast that you wander in its shade
as in our eternal lives we will have time to go far

So long as we can breathe, and our eyes can see,
So long as we will share our lives and I give my heart to thee.

Inspired by irrational Kimmi