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The Raft

The raft was breaking.

Just the two of us, on opposite corners, rocking gently, drifting. She seemed secure where she was, smiling like it was all okay, but I could feel the cracks beneath me; hear the creaking wood, and knew I had to move.

She said there was no room on her side anymore. The weight of both of us would be too much for the fragile raft, she said. Maybe she was right. Either way, I couldn't stay.

I told her I would swim, to look for somewhere safe, hoping she'd grab me and pull me close... but she didn't. "Are you sure?" is all she said.

And so I said my goodbyes and slipped into the inky black waters of the unknown.

It was cold in the water and my strength drained quickly, doubt weighing on my every stroke as I pulled myself this way and that, searching for a light to guide me. But none was found and before long, I found myself back at the raft.

I called to her, reached out to her... "why can't we work together?" I cried.

No reply. No outstretched hand. No hope. No love.

I started to sink. The cold, black sea longed to claim me as its own and take me down into its empty, dark depths. My body aches with the struggle. The sorrow in my heart weighs too much now and at last, I let go.

Only she can save me now...

pchinnery

@pchinnery

London based loner, wandering through the shadows of his mind. Twitter: @paulchinnery

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Beautiful :)

@kayleigh123 really? Thanks :)

That was tragically beautiful. I have to ask though; was it inspired by the ending scene in the film Titanic?

@Nom thanks :) it was inspired by the breakdown of my relationship, honestly hadn't thought about titanic. Maybe it was there subconsciously?

@pchinnery that makes it all the more tragic that it is based on personal experience! Perhaps yes, our subconscious mind does the craziest things!

@pchinnery that makes it all the more tragic that it is based on personal experience! Perhaps yes, our subconscious mind does the craziest things!

@pchinnery that makes it all the more tragic that it is based on personal experience! Perhaps yes, our subconscious mind does the craziest things!

@pchinnery that makes it all the more tragic that it is based on personal experience! Perhaps yes, our subconscious mind does the craziest things!

Sorry that posted 4 times! It kept telling me there was an error posting!

@Nom thats okay. I appreciate you taking the time to post anything :)

All so beautiful throughout, but that last line just did it for me. Compelling.

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