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He Bites (TWO) Well

Precise words leave lips, here no tongues slip...
As he guides her hips closer than he's suppose to seducing to provoke her

He looks deep to hypnotise with his bright and sultry eyes

Giving rise to whispers of ill advise, She agrees with rejoice

She thinks she's made a decision but never really had a choice, enchanted by his voice under the spell of his smell the fruits of a delicious type of hell

Soft, hard lips are moist words whip but don't cut as he destroys reprise
" its your juice or my demise"

Seducing when his fingers gently part her thighs

Her eloquent body becomes relaxed

short of breath no strength left unable to resist this caress of death

"why do you want me" she says completely unalarmed

"you have something I need, but I'll do you no harm" his finger tips trace across the contours of her arm

" To me your blood is liquid... Liquid napalm, fire and cream soda... A cocktail of passion supernova... a mocha of blood choca"

"Over your naked body your sauce I want to drizzle"

"Lend me your neck and I'll drink just a little"

"in return for your juices I will caress your very middle."

She sings "you'll catch me when I fall?"

Sincerely he commends "I'll be the missing brick from your wall"

His last words as he leans in whilst she is still conceding not quite conceiving, If the vampire is deceiving she's falling from a high, Its too late to consider
leaving...

His lips press soft
saliva smears across, in her mouth their tongues dance...
she's locked into a trance of blissful ambience as he shifts in his stance she has no vigilance

moving closer to his kill seduction is his skill, he has broken her down devoured all of her will...

Now hands caress her neck as he plays the prospect of playing with the beauty that will become his evening meal

he's suddenly overwhelmed she's become the Achilles of his heel for the moment at least time now stands... still...

His thoughts go against him, question his very nature, his conscience starts to mention projecting thoughts of protection over this object of affection, interception, intervention.

warming his chill that
he is now bound for the first time feelings, he feels,

his conscious stabs deep "what you truly love you can't kill!"

As he thrusts deep inside her...

he does bite deep, the darkness did inward creep, bleak was the setting passion and fangs are his weapon with great speed his teeth sweep

Deep his fangs sink smeared in red ink his jaws clamp down she weeps, but doesn't blink so tightly they become linked embraced in caress naked no less, his hand cupping her breast the other around her throat but not to tight to force or choke

She gives him what he wants so intense from moments spent, from when he first met her they both feel the coming release of immense pressure, leisure without measure the scream from her lips was not pain, but pure lust releasing the sound collated of pure pleasure.

Β©EDWARD GEE HUMPHREY

Edhum3

@Edhum3

Just spreading some words

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Some amazing lines in here! Passion super nova- brilliant! Truly an entrancing piece πŸŒŸπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸŒŸπŸ”₯πŸ”₯πŸ”₯

@ckahn I agree. Great stuff πŸ‘πŸ’š

Wow your vamp is certainly more sensual than my vamp Hun ....the lovely @ckahn said we had both written about sultry vamps but yours is def more darkly sensual....love itπŸ’šπŸ’—πŸ’šπŸ’—πŸ’š

@misslittleDHP hmm think I'll give it a little read :) thank you x

@ckahn @eddie12309 thank you ladies it went through a slight editathon this morning - sunshine is so inspiring :)

@misslittleDHP I thought that when I read yours too. Must be vamp day πŸ‘Ώ

@eddie12309 @eddie12309 @ckahn hey I have edited and finished this now - please review and offer a little feedback πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ’

@Edhum3 I thought it was pretty amazing first time around!

@ckahn aww thanks

You're an amazing writer and both show that very well. It's hard to compare when I don't have the other to refer back to but my initial response to the first was that you provided an experience that gently grabbed and took hold. The style suited well to feeling you were trying to create. Really, almost poetic genius. It's hard to see how it could be improved. For what it's worth, I think your first instincts were right on. πŸ’—πŸ’—πŸ’—

I agree with @ckahn your witting is amazing the words definitely take you on a journey πŸ‘πŸ’—πŸ’—πŸ’—

I agree with @ckahn. It's difficult to compare. But I thought the original was good. You take us in a journey with his and her need with a brilliance for description. You could have used a okay on words at the end " collagulated pure pleasure. " πŸ‘πŸ’šmorΓ© plegase

*more please.

Aagghhh autocorrect- should have said play on words

@eddie12309 my god that's a big word! Lol I have a real limited vocabulary hmm... I learn some new words then give it a bit of jiggery pokery... Thanks Ed great feedback πŸ˜ŠπŸ‘

@ckahn thank you for feedback 😘 I think I've lost the original dagnamit!!

@sjw whoop whoop I like claps ;)

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