I now have love
That will never be returned,
That I can never act upon,
For it will break me up,
Rip me into shreds
Scattered in the wind.
It hurts
To realise that
You can never love the way you want to love.
It hurts
To be the person you are
To be unloved.
Unloving.
I'm lost.
Trapped.
In a cage of self-loathing.
Wishing I could be
Something I'm not.
If I can't have love
Then I can have hope
Hope,
That someday
I learn to love.
Your feedback helps Nom understand what's working
Life's a mystery.
Some people say Its not worth the pain To have your heart broken Is it always the same. How would I know. Ive never had the chance The flutter in my heart Or that very first glance How would I know.
I probably won't love you in ten years time.
never felt so lonely. never felt so unwanted. never felt comfortable in my own skin. never stopped wishing I was someone else. never will stop loving the wrong guys.
Don't Fall Down. A long time ago someone once told me. "Don't look back, or you'll fall down". I never realized it was true. Until I looked back. And I fell for you. Cuz even the brightest lights.
I know you'll never see this And I know you don't care I know that you must be happy I'm no longer there I know I'm torn And I know you took the pain away I know you once cared Every damn day I...
My chest is a empty space With a care worn shell Inside my heart Is a living hell Sadness and loss rip at my insides whenever I'm feeling my worst.
You never cease to make me laugh. My life seems so worth while. But right deep down inside me. I'm sporting a fake smile. Whenever you're around. I forget the troubles of the time.
You are memorable, because you were different. Past tense. I am forgettable because I am the same. Present. ...hardly a gift but current nonetheless. You were one I wanted to believe.
I really like this, especially the penultimate verse. I think the little repetitions work really nicely as well.
Start with loving (accepting) yourself and then everything else starts to fall into place. Don't be your own worst enemy. There are enough negative people out there to do that job and we need to stop then with positivity. I sound a little 60s hippy. Can you feel the love, man? Lol
@redfae thanks for the ( slightly clichéd ;)) advice! No seriously thanks for commenting, it means a lot
@naaviie what changed? That's a genuine question; I'm interested in how/where you think the tone of my poems changed!
Just the feeling I got, but up to "Rolling hills" is one sort of tone, then from there to "Alone in the mist" slightly different again, then up to "martyr", which feels like quite a turning point, then the new direction/tone gains more ... Something... It's like you've been healing. Hope you don't mind me saying.
@naaviie I don't mind at all. Interesting about 'Rolling Hills' because that was the first day of a holiday in Wales. I think I was still on holiday when I wrote 'Martyr', I think the Battle Royale series were the first I wrote back from holiday. I guess the break helped! I really think Opuss has helped mature my writing, is that something you've found?
@naaviie and maybe I have been healing in a way, in the sense by writing these poems I've expelled these demons. My poems now are certainly less self reflective. Thanks for helping me see that!
Yeh, definitely like you've opened up yourself a bit more (by looking out rather than inwards?) was really interesting to see that trough your writing. Opuss is really inspiring for me, it's changed my perspective on a few things and helped improve my writing style.
@naaviie yes I was trying to think of the opposite to 'introspective'! Retrospective is backwards. Is extrospective a word?
Extrospection, according to my dictionary = the consideration and observation of things external to oneself.
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