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Revealed, Congealed, Concealed

(a continuation of my previous poem)

I wake up in the morning,
Paint on my defence,
Layer upon layer
Of a beautiful pretence.
Because everyone knows it's not enough,
To leave your face
In the buff.
Eyelashes just just aren't long enough,
Lips aren't quite shiny enough.
Dark circles must go,
Red cheeks ad uneven skin,
That's a big no no!
Is it really a cover up?
To conform with society?
Or is it our defences,
For all the outside world to see.
For when I'm dressed up to the nines,
No one can shake me.

PoppyA

@PoppyA

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Beautiful as usual babe 😘

@aleishagayle20 ; thank you β˜ΊπŸ’—

@PoppyA : hi!! I like this sentiment, but if I can give a little bit of constructive feedback? The double rhyming of 'defence' is a bit awkward. Do you think it need tinkering with? Just a thought xxx

@eliza ; thank you for your feedback 😊 it was supposed to be pretence but I wrote this before even getting out of bed so apologies for the haziness πŸ˜„ thanks again πŸ˜ŠπŸ’—

@PoppyA : much better! ☺

Using defence and pretence is very clever, great write poppy! πŸ’š

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@naaviie ; thank you sweet 😊 I wrote it half asleep with a bit of help from @eliza πŸ˜ŠπŸ’—

@RichWithey ; thank you 😊 aren't you glad you aren

* aren't female! 😽

Just shows off your pre-coffee talent πŸ˜œπŸ’š

@naaviie ; haha. Is it sad that the first thing I think about is Opuss? πŸ˜„ don't mention coffee, I've drunk loads today - I'm piddling like a racehorse! πŸ˜„πŸ’—

Hahaha no way! I am almost guilty of the same, but then decide not to feel guilty about it 😜 hahaha maybe lay of the coffee for a bit 🐎

Off**

@naaviie ; think I maybe should πŸ˜„ & tbh I think most people are guilty as charged when it comes to Opuss, it's so addictive! xx

Slap on the cuffs and send us all to Opuss Prison! 😜

@naaviie ; haha I feel a poem coming on ... Fancy a collaboration? I'll do one from the Opuss prisoner point of view and you do one from the Opuss prison guard point if view? πŸ˜ΊπŸ’—

Ooooo yes that would be exciting!! πŸ’š

@naaviie ; I will put mine up soon as I can, should be working really πŸ˜„ πŸ’—

Okies I'll try work something out πŸ˜ƒβœ¨

Great follow up hun xx

@PoppyA @naaviie it's crazy how it just takes over but a great kind of crazy lol πŸ’ž

@sjw a super kind of crazy ✨✨

@naaviie yeah just like us @PoppyA lol 😽😽

Nice one πŸ’πŸ‘€

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