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In the shadows

(Plot: Mid Afternoon, In the woods, 1700s)

[SUSAN *Walks In the woods to collects Berries for her father and mother, as she walks she gets an eerie feeling as if someone was following her*

[Edward: walks into woods to chop wood for his father

[Susan: sees a bush full of berries and runs to it This has just enough berries for my family. backs away from the bush and runs into A man holding an axe AHHHH!

[Edward: SUSAN! hush!

[Susan: Edward? Why are you holding an axe?

[Edward: Wood..To burn. We are running out.

[Benjamin(Susan's father): HURRY UP WITH THOSE BERRIES!

[Susan: I should get going. I don't know how long we can keep sneaking around.

Edward: Well, maybe if you stood up to your parents--

Susan: THEY'LL HAVE MY KILLED!

Edward: but you dont love Alexander. You love me.

Susan: but my parents hate your family.

Edward: They've never gotten to know us!

Susan: what more is there to know? Walks away

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The only comment I'd make is that if it's set in the 1700's you should think about the language they would have used then. But so far there's not much to go on. 👍

Okay. I will try @eddie12309

@YouShouldKnow good stuff. Keep writing!😃

I think you should keep writing

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