Ashes, ashes they won't fall down
Retributions here....
They're taking your crown
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Comments & Feedback (18)
The bloody and often pointless human struggle. On the upside, history has led to 'Fifty Shades of Grey' so that's good. :-) This is an intelligent, eloquent and thought-provoking write. Congrats!!
@wolfie lol! Thanks😊 I always feel like I'm cheating when I resort to this standard, boring rhyming pattern but Dan was harassing me for an "ashes" piece so... It's timely content 😘
It's not the standard or boring is it? It's the words you choose to inhabit that style. And you have chosen well hunny 👍❤👏😘
@leelee101 hmmm. Good point king lee. I tend to feel my poems viscerally so if the same pattern courses through too often I feel like I'm stuck in a rut. Perhaps I should just stop being so hard on myself😏😘
@ckahn no problem. I'm probably guilty of sticking to rigid patterns, although I float off every now and then, but I like to think that I choose the best possible words in each piece. I often write one out and by the time I've posted it most of the words are different because I've found a better one! But it's horses for courses isn't it, because I understand your need to 'feel' the piece. Nothing wrong with visceral, packs the punch a bit more. What would be standard and boring though, would be if we were all the same in our style, and quite clearly we're not, and we're all the better for it. takes a breath You're not being harsh on yourself, don't change, so you used a regular rhyming pattern. So what? Still a cracking piece hunny. I'll go away now... 😂😂👍❤👏👏💋
@leelee101 all good points my friend. Thank you for the pep talk😘 you certainly are certified grade A sweetie now aren't you? 😍❤😍
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