Stories From Starters

This was a story I did for homework in English so comment on it to prove my teacher wrong lol and yes the main character has the same name as my sim.
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It's strange how after a few minutes in the dark your eyes adjust and objects begin to appear, thought Damian, just as he became aware of something taking shape that he was not expecting to see at all. It looked like a large animal, Damian could hear it's breath as he slowly backed away but it wad too late, the animal swung round and howled, it was the most bloodcurdling howl he had ever heard and now he knew what it was, " Dean! " Damian scoffed," you aren't supposed to sneak up on pack members!"
" was it that easy? " Dean groaned after he had shifted into a boy again," we wolf-people need to keep an eye on each other" . Damian rolled his eyes and walked out of the warehouse, his brown hair lightly blew across his face and the glare of the sun caught in his eyes, he loved being a wolf-person because of the way people treat you, they fear you and fear is the feeling wolf-people adore most.