Look in the mirror
Hate what I see
Ugly and jealous
Looking at me.
Hate that I hate
What I see deep within
When I should be content
In my body and skin.
I wish I could write something
Not about me
I wish I could write more
Laterally.
I wish I could write without
Needing to rhyme
But I can't and I won't
So I'll end with this line.
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Life's a mystery.
This irrational fear. It's time to get my arse into gear. Take it head on. And make this fear be gone. Maybe it is time. For family to hear my rhyme. And see how I express.
Change my path it's clear, Change my path I must, Change my life from here, To a place that's filled with trust.
My mind is always running But filled with empty thoughts Need some new equations See the battles fought Mind over me and you and us That's what I see That's all I see I don't know how To self...
I guess I'm a young cursive girl, stuck in a print kind of world, my heads in a dizzy my soda's not fizzy my hair is flat. Others are curled.
I need,. I crave,. I have,. To save,. I want,. I must,. I yearn,. I lust,. I will,. I still,. Deserve,. The thrill,. In turn,. I'll learn,. I need,. To earn,. I've shown,. I've grown,. I have,.
I could lay here and pretend I'm sane. Cry out the lies I've given just like I have been everyday.
Softly, softly, heart be still. Be calm and listen, if you will. Gently, gently, all is right. Shield me from tempestuous night. Darkly, darkly, hear sirens cry. To burn my wings they can but try.
Every face can tell it's story, Every name it tells it's tale. Every step can tell it's journey. Every success can show it's fail. Every feeling can be shown. Every word can be expressed.
I like this but the line ending with 'laterally' grates a little, mainly because it's not a word naturally pronounced with four syllables but three. The rhyming pattern forces he reader to make it four if they're to avoid being left hanging and it just seems forced. That being said I struggle to think of an alternative. If I do
@Zoodark I'm glad you're being polite, I honestly think this is one of the worst things I've ever written. I agree about the 'laterally' line, I'm open to suggestions!
@Nom I'll make it a project: MISSION: The Lateral Dysfunction. Sounds like a Peter F Hamilton novel :OP
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