The two teenagers were on a mission. They wanted to film something funny, and knew exactly what they had in mind. They hurried over to the abandoned house. They set up a tripod and the camera. Then, one rushed into the house.
"Let's get this in one take please John. This place is giving me the creeps!" said the first teen. Her long blonde hair whisked round the corner as she pulled her jacket off.
"Okay, I'm ready for you Christie in 3,2 ... Action!"
"Hello, and welcome to my house. Now once I win the lottery I will ... "
Suddenly the stairs croaked. John gave out a yelp as he reviewed what they had already shot. A shadow, on the stairs, behind Christie.
"What the hell.. ?!" John was shocked. When suddenly the stairs gave a massive groan. The whistling of the wind cracked and continued. The house sounded as though it was laughing, and out of the corner of his eye, John saw another shadow.
Then John noticed Christie, was white. She slowly walked upstairs, as though determined to see if anyone else was there. Suddenly she gave out a cry and fell backwards, as though pushed.
John picked her up and carried her outside. He decided to forget about the camera, and get Christie back to safety.
But if he'd only looked at the camera, he'd be astonished by what he saw. The tripod fell, the camera still recording as it became engulfed in the Dust of the house. Still recording. Still focusing on what was in front of it.
GIVE ME YOUR THOUGHTS, please. It's my first time in trying to write a thriller, and I want to know if it's okay :) please :) I'd really appreciate all feedback, thanks
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