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Edit My Factual Fiction Song!

HingAling24
HingAling24 β€’ 220 followers

@smellyfingers

Chop or change it as you feel buddy ;) obviously needs a chorus and hook....

Factual Fiction

The bigger the explanation the larger the lie, the smaller the tear the bigger the cry, We all walk by...why? a small sacrifice could save someones life.

A small sacrifice could Change a mind. be a widowed wife with a knife wishing to end her life, always sat at home alone, her neighbours didn't know....

They were too stoned

Forced to set a grow cant afford the repayments on what they call home, in debt with dealers who know where they live the names of their kids Places they have been, that's the life they lead..reach out to a friend they need

They didn't see...he was!

Consumed by greed, actively seeking relief In exploiting people's need unknowingly fuelling their grief leading to a disbelief in a life they want to achieve

I scream please,

When will the vicious circle stop, when will we learn there's no bottom, middle or top, we're all in this together, our life legacy lives forever so use your mind wisely and let your body jump wildly...

Daniel Hing 21.10.12

#addiction #community-struggle #general #mental-health #social-commentary #urban-poetry
HingAling24

@HingAling24

When I was dipped in the river Styx, no part of my body was missed, my thesis stressed Thetis did enlist a power unknown by man to exist........ Silly Achilles A follow for a follow ;) #projecthumanity

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Comments & Feedback (14)

sjw
sjw
Oct 24, 2012 at 7:20 PM

Ooo I really like this looking forward to what @smelkyfingers does with it πŸ‘πŸ˜˜

sjw
sjw
Oct 24, 2012 at 7:20 PM

@smellyfingers

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 24, 2012 at 8:36 PM

The main parts of the song are copyrighted but if u do wish to add a chorus, your input shall be recognised when its produced ;)

smellyfingers
smellyfingers
Oct 25, 2012 at 8:44 AM

Cool, I like it mate. What kind of style and genre is it for? Is it a duet? You said before that you rap, would you like it upbeat and for me to write a rap chorus? I'd say the 3rd stanza needs work. I can just write/rework it how I think it could be or you can give me some more input?? Do you have kik messenger app?

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 25, 2012 at 9:49 AM

It's going to be a lady and I performing it! I mostly (slow rap) and she would be singing! Well it's a tricky one as obviously if you rework the stanzas which do need a little attention and add choruses were talking a collaboration there! Will need to be copyrighted again! I'm happy to do that, your name can be added, and the possibility of it being released would mean you would have to be paid for your input ;) so ill leave it up to you mate! The main body is upbeat but the choruses slow! I don't have kik but something tells me I should lol πŸ‘

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 25, 2012 at 9:53 AM

It's one thing I've struggled with for a while is writing choruses and hooks! You can she the female artist on YouTube 'Aiesha India Patel' gives you an idea on her range and I've got a demo on soundcloud under Mindpower@hingaling that gives you an idea on speed ;)

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 25, 2012 at 9:53 AM

@smellyfingers ;)

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 25, 2012 at 9:59 AM

Thanks for this bro! I'm quite looking forward to what you come up with! ;)

smellyfingers
smellyfingers
Oct 25, 2012 at 10:11 AM

Cool, I'm working on it now (complete rework but keeping most of your words/ideas, bit of restructure, move this here and that there and add a chorus lol), I'll check her out on YouTube and your soundcloud in a bit. β˜ΊπŸ‘

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 25, 2012 at 10:17 AM

Try and keep the connection between stanzas! I like that lol ;)

HopeForWings23
HopeForWings23
Oct 25, 2012 at 6:23 PM

@HingAling24

HopeForWings23
HopeForWings23
Oct 25, 2012 at 6:27 PM

@HingAling24 I think you should make the chorus upbeat and the versus a little slower it would make it better so that people can't stop singing it when it comes on :)

HingAling24
HingAling24
Oct 25, 2012 at 6:30 PM

@HopeForWings23 thanks for the input! That indeed does sound like a good idea!! πŸ‘πŸ‘β€πŸ˜œ

HopeForWings23
HopeForWings23
Oct 25, 2012 at 6:47 PM

@HingAling24 your welcome I'm a songwriter and I know people like upbeat and slow :) have fun and good luck :) x

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