Sign In
Back

The Listeners-Part III

As he made his way into the kitchen, David Jones was flabbergasted. Never in his life he had seen something like it. His eyes were fixated on the unbelievable thing that was before him ...

The kitchen was covered in dust. So much dust. And part of the roof had collapsed due to the weight of a branch from an oak tree outside. It seemed like the kitchen's Victorian era detail was untouched. And in the middle of the floor lay something. Something not human. David felt himself begin to walk towards the strange creature when ... CRASH!
Parts of the roof began falling, it ended up smashing again the timber wood flooring and, with that weakening it, the floor collapsed under David's weight.

4minutes later ...
As David began to regain Consciousness, he noticed he was in some sort of cellar.
He quickly grabbed his flashlight. That's when he noticed it. A skeleton staring back at him.
He yelped. The only reason he was in this house was to prove to some teenagers that there was nothing to be afraid of, an here he was. Staring at a skeleton.

It was then, he felt it. A hand grab his shoulder. He threw his elbow up hoping to strike his attacker in the face... Hang on, he thought. If someone was grabbing him, then they aren't one of these ghouls, and could be human. He spun round. There he was, by himself again. It was strange. He was sure someone had grabbed him. It was then he saw it. A door. An old wooden door. Suddenly a scream came from behind the door. He had to go in. There was no choice.
He put his hand on the door handle, and slowly twisted ...

ben_leggatt

@ben_leggatt

18years old, hope to have a career in the media industry at some point in the near future :) Oh and I'm welsh :) and every story I make I will hopefully manage to make into a film or TV Series at some point in the future. Director and co-founder of CleverBoxMedia.com ! Anybody who would be willing to help me make my stories into either a book, film or Tv series just let me know. INSTAGRAM-Ben_Leggatt Black belt and coach in karate for Seki Ryu Zan!!! Also, anyone who's just starting and needs advice and help, just let me know :) Oh and if you show me respect I will show respect back to you. Many Thanks,

100
Stories

Similar Stories

Comments & Feedback (12)

Still great, might read them from the beginning tonight, better feeling of horror to match it. (-: keep up the good work.

@Stablish thanks mate :) I'm honestly surprised by all the positive reaction to this series :O

@ben_leggatt Yeah it's good, wait till it gets busy later, should get more feedback. (-:

@Stablish thanks man! :D can't wait :)

Love it :D

@saxhiggy thanks :) really appreciate the feedback :D

Again, it's awesome! And again I am so excite to her what happens next!! :)

@PoppyA thanks :) I hope the next part doesn't disappoint you then :) I've just posted it now :) hope you like it :)

You're very good at ending on a cliff hanger and manage it even if the pieces are really short

@redfae thanks :) I think it's a way of getting readers to come back and read the next part to see what happens next :D and I think that's one of my main weaknesses-that my parts are short :/ still it's something I can improve on, therefore thank you for your feedback :D

@ben_leggatt it's easy, your chapter can be made up of all the parts or just call it a short story :). It's the perfect length for this app - well done :)

@redfae thanks :) :D

Similar Writers