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Deep Down

Down.
Down.
Down.....
Deep
Down
Deeper
Down
Still
Quiet
Silence
Down
Further
Down
Dark
Shhhhhhh
Darker
Keep going
Down
Darkness
Shhhhhhh
We are here
Abyss
Don't move
Shhhhhhh
Now.....

Yawn desperate breathes
Legs awkwardly pumping
Arms rapidly turning
Frozen invisible breaths
Eyes hopelessly squirming
Transparent neon lifeforms
Oh.......I...can't.....see.....you

Taunting
Echoing sounds
Distorted senses in
Muted agony
Don't.....panic.....Just.....
Feel
Feel
Feel
The slow
Misery
Slipping
Gently
Away
Now..........
.....MOVE QUICKLY!!
Quicker
Faster
Hurry
No.....I.....can't..... look
It's here
On me
The stinging tail
Whipping
Furiously
Seeking
Fear
Death
Death
Laughing
Teasing
Kiss it
Taste it
Consume
Whole........THEN.........

WAKE UP!!!!

smellyfingers

@smellyfingers

Asking lots of questions and thinking through the ones that are unanswered!! Kik: smellyfingers soundcloud: www.soundcloud.com/smellyfingers

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Comments & Feedback (36)

I wouldn't go down and deeper down...brrrr

Sounds a lot like a famous danish joke from a show called Rytteriet LOL :D

It sound like what happens when I try to meditate, I get so relaxed and then at the moment I get that feeling I get scared and think I'm having a stroke or something and snap out of it. Lol that's how I read it anyway. Good stuff regardless (-:

@sark why wouldn't you??

@DuRoLuRo I'm not Danish....so no idea lol

@Stablish cool. Yeah the

@smellyfingers fear of the dark...

(Sorry stupid phones) its ment to be a very slow tempo at the start, like being hypnotised, then quite quick, then slowed back down. Imagine 1 guy speaking it in a theatre with some echo and a few loud shouts here and there and some weird guitar sounds. I'm a big fan of the doors music and they have a song called "the celebration of the lizard" and they do this kind of thing half way through a song......very powerful. YouTube it mate and you will know what I mean ;-)

Deep man !! :)))) x

@sark how will you get over your fear if you don't confront it? Would yo like me to guide you? X

@velvetscorpion1972 loool thanks x

@smellyfingers I love the doors

@smellyfingers sounds good will check it now, nice one mate keep up the good work. (-:

@glensaggs jim is a big inspiration isn't he? Do you know the song I mean? He used to ad lib live on stage with it but they turned it into a song using a few other bits he done like "once I had a little game, a little game, called go insane" Lmfao check it out, get stoned, lights off and music UP!!! ;-)

@smellyfingers don't offer your help, you don't know how much I'd need...

@sark I'm quite patient.....come shall we go now? Lol x

@smellyfingers I've got a couple of his concerts on cassette where he just goes right into one talking in riddles for about 20 minutes the only problem is I don't have a cassette player anymore lol

@smellyfingers what did you think of the film.

@glensaggs Lmfao is that "ode to a butterfly"? Theres a long YouTube video of him live on stage out his nut and he starts hallucinating, it's pretty cool. His "live" stuff is much better, you can hear and feel the emotion in his voice

@glensaggs film isn't true jim. That's Hollywood fantasy. Read patrica kenealy-morrison's book or you tune jim Morrison the lost Paris tapes. American prayer album is cool too ;-)

Awesome :-) love it you just constantly surpass yourself 😃

I'd go up it would be sunnier and hotter hehehe@smellyfingers

@aleishagayle20 Awww thanks baby. Glad you like it. ;-) xxx

@smellyfingers what can u say I'm your biggest fan 😜 keep going love it! X

Lol what can I say lol hehe stupid phone x

While I was reading it 2 songs were making a mix in my head: scaretale and ghost river, both from nightwish, check those out@smellyfingers ;)

Your picture is creepy and scary @smellyfingers

@aleishagayle20 thank you honey x Mwah

@sark will do, thanks for the tip ;-) x

@kateiscoolyeah which is why you shouldn't be following me, I put a warning in my profile. My content isn't suitable for 10yr olds. Please unfollow me. No offence!! I hope you understand!!

@smellyfingers an excellent piece, you have an great awareness of the "falling" effect :)

@Weirdwolf thank you. When I write I try too "feel" what I'm writing and put my mind into the situation (how would I feel, what would I do, whats around me, ect ect) if that makes sense? I'm glad you enjoyed it :-)

For some reason unrelated; I imagined frank from Donnie Darko saying the last line ;)

@greyhok Donnie Darko is too awesome :D

@smellyfingers You're a scary, scary man! Ha ha ha. I'm with the Wolf on that panicky meditation feel. J x

@greyhok @Zoodark thank you both, appreciate it fellas. Imagine LSD trip listening to that with haunting guitar type sounds and some sudden beats? Lmfao ;-)

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