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Knock At The Door (Version 1)

Hang on, mate...
Someone just knocked
At my door. No -
I'll stay on the phone...

Bloody lock is stiff again.

Only a prank caller.
Yup.There was no-one there.
Yeh.. Happens a lot round here.
There's these teens
Who live on the corner of -

Shit! Did you hear that?
Made me jump!
Nah, I'm fine.
They're tapping...
Tapping on the window.

No. Can't see anyone.

Definitely no-one.
Moon's out.
It's bright enough, even
Through the fog.
Little shits.
So ... Friday. Is Stokes coming?

Wait a sec, mate.

PISS OFF HOME
OR I'M CALLING THE POLICE.
Yes, they're still at it.
Trying to scare me now.
No, sort of heavy, slow knocks.
On the door. LITTLE FREAKS!

I was too busy trying
To get Nicola into bed
When I was their age.
I know mate, but
At least I tried!
Shut your mouth -
You did not!
She told me you didn't.

Fuck!
Still there, Dave?
Dropped the phone -
One of them had his hand
Right through my
Letter box!
Trying to reach the fucking latch
By the looks of it.

This has gone beyond a joke.
I need to go and sort this out.
Yes, outside. Police?
Get lost. I'll handle this myself.
Bloody kids. Be right back.

Cheap, shitty lock. Agh.

Right, where are you then,
Big men! Come into the light
Where I can see you.
COME ON. Cowards.

Too chicken-shit to come any..
Hey! How did you get in here!
Get out! You can't do th -

wolfie

@wolfie

The Octoberman. All I need is a bottle of Talisker, a keyboard and you. Facebook: Nikarkham www.nikarkham.co.uk

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Scary cause it happens so much😨

This is hilarious!!! πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚

Scary, love the suspense!!πŸ˜‰πŸ˜„πŸ˜ƒπŸ˜πŸ˜œ

@naaviie not the reaction I expected but hey :-)

Ok, so I'm a bit odd - everyone else seems to find it scary! Hummmm oh well, I had a good chuckle.

@michga thanks! That's what I was trying for. Think I may have misfired :-)

@naaviie no problem. Don't expect to get every piece right :-)

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Nooooo there is nothing wrong with this! Clearly I'm in a silly mood... 😜 @RichWithey glad to make you laugh

@wolfie ...You kept me gripped though!!😁😜😁😳

@RichWithey just thought I'd try the one-sided phone conversation cliche horror thang. But I guess it didn't work - ah well, there's always shots of Talisker to make me smile :-)

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@RichWithey gotta love Talisker. 🍻

@michga I'm pleased it was interesting :-)

@wolfie ... Very and entertainingly gripping, but amusing!!πŸ˜‰πŸ˜œπŸ˜„πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

It is kinda scary but I think the guys reaction or use of language made it slightly funny at the same time so I'm kinda with @naaviie and@RichWithey on this one I enjoyed it tho πŸ‘πŸ˜˜

@sjw thank goodness for that!!

@sjw so am I! It's all good. The narrator was supposed to sound like a bit of an ordinary idiot like me failing to survive. At least it raised a smile eh

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