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Not My God...

Slender beams of moonlight enter
this darkened place as I kneel,
Always lost, always alone,
frozen here, waiting, unable to feel.

Angelic forms wrought in panes of
glass loom as dust dances in the air,
A priest embalming the living dead
for a god, believed we all share.

Envisioned, embedded the devil
forming an image in my mind,
infiltrating my darkened soul.
Religion knowing how to find.

Realization dawning on my face.
is it here? A faith to misplace.

I raise my head, now crying out for
this oblivious belief.
A god mine? A god yours?
a place to turn to for guidance during
this anguish filled grief.

Sacrificed mind, body and soul.
as preached the competing holy trinity,
Darkness fills this place, as I kneel
alone, I'd rather the shadows give in to me.

( inspired? By heaven shunned by borderline)

LivingDeadGirl

@LivingDeadGirl

22 year old love to read write and sing. Here to explore and share the words.

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Amazing and very descriptive 😄 great write!!

@Dovahkiin Thank you. Just a feeling I got today. Thanks for the comment.

My dear, where did you get the inspiration for this piece?

@ckahn :,(

@ckahn I'm sorry I was remembering when I went to a church. It kind of inspiring I guess.

@LivingDeadGirl I see. Thanks for clearing that up. :')

I'm curious though, several of your lines are identical to a poem entitled Heaven Shunned yet you give no credit to the original author. I found it on Underground poetry. Is that where you found it?

@ckahn no I've not seen it there I can nclude this author but I can assure you that this is what came to my mind.

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@ckahn I've just seen it yes I see the similarities, but this is my work, it was inspired by the passing of my mother and everybody took me to church. I will include the author in this tho I would not like anybody assuming I have copied or plagiarised. Thank you for your comments and bringing this to my attention.

@ckahn I'd just like to add also when I looked I didn't see several similarities more along 3/4 similar lines, but people are welcome to judge for themselves, page rising was not my intention at all :(

@Dovahkiin @LivingDeadGirl @ckahn I though seeing as this 'incident has happened I thought I'd let you read the comments see what you think and comment or not I you want to. Your opinions may have changed so I'll leave it you to decide. Thank you for your time and for reading my post and comments.

@LivingDeadGirl Wow. I like the style of this @ckahn I looked at that poem, and it's only two lines that are the same. How does that warant credit to anyone?

@DuRoLuRo It's fine, I'm glad you like thanks, I've added the author now. I don't want people think I'm plagiarising. That was really not my intention. I don't remember ever looking at that poem or ever hearing it. :-/ I think adding the author has resolved this issue (hopefully) at least it was brought to my attention. Thank you for your comment.

I want to make something very clear. Incidents have happened. Just a little info about Opuss. Liars get found out.

But you know that don't you ;)

@LivingDeadGirl are you saying that 2 separate writers can write identical lines in that manner???? Btw it's not 2 lines either is it. Blatant plagiarism yet again, some people never learn and just take the pee. We both know you are AG whether you admit it or not! You cannot change your writing style we all have a unique way of writing and you are far from original!! Sad, very, very sad AG!

@smellyfingers @iPuss @ckahn As stated, clear evidence in this (& other posts) of plagairised work again & it's so obvious who you are. Do everyone a favour & go & haunt someone else-there's no place for this on Opuss & yet you continually attempt to abuse it. Sad.

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