When I opened my eyes, I realised I was outside. Outside the zone, outside the safety. Under the harsh light of the natural moon. No artificial lights, no artificial oxygen, no artificial food, houses, anything out here, to keep me alive. This was the Outside, the place every child was told stories about, warned never to go there. A wild, unruly, disheveled place, torn by wars, between man and nature, nature and nature, man and man. Torn, and dangerous, oh so dangerous, with its savage plants and creatures that would hurt you, kill you, eat you.
I stood up, and could see the City, far off in the distance, it's neon lights twinkling knowingly, reflecting off the bubble, the force field, the 'unit of protection' that covered the City. That let no one out, and no one in.
Why was I here? How had I got out here? But more important, how was I going to get back inside?
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Comments & Feedback (18)
@leelee101 Ooo, I'll try, but this was just going to be for the opussweeklychallenge thing, so don't expect too muchπ
@leelee101 probably, I'm just not so good with stories...they either turn out way to long and drawn out, or shirt, and crammed in.
Yey, I liked too ππ Trick with a story is time and editing... Patience to write it and some more to lengthen / shorten it where necessary... This could be great! πππ
This is a great opener. But I've just read your comments above. Before writing anymore, the advice I'd give is to plan it so that you don't drag on or cut off too short. But I'd love to read more. πππππ
@eddie12309 I never used to do that, and you might have seem where it got me! At least 3 stories started, and not finished, ending on chapter 5 or less!
@eddie12309 I always try and plan, but since this was #opussweeklychallenge, and I didn't really realise so many people would like it, I didn't make a plan. I'll try and make one now. π
@Platypus don't rush it sweetie, only do it if you feel you have a story. It stands fine in its own as flash fiction. ππ
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