Fear clutched at my heart as the evil beast of the night bounded towards me, ferocious jaws bared in a fearsome snarl. As the fiend drew ever closer, the silver moonlight gleaming on its long, dark fur, it opened that terrifying mouth, letting out a petrifying howl that rooted me to the spot and chilled me to the bone. The monster loped still towards me, and I saw the eyes, red eyes so malevolent, like fiery pits, windows into the hell from which it came. The last thing I saw as a human was it's gaping maw, teeth closing in to seal my fate...
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Great description, I'm a fan of beasts not gonna lie ;) you've touched on the fact that the protagonist was rooted to the spot with fear, but maybe you could develop that a little, something like 'I willed my feet to run' or 'I knew I should try to escape, but pure terror had turned rationality to blind stupidity' just something to remind us why the character is trying to get away and save themselves. Otherwise great job!
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