Hey, I was just wondering if someone would be able to read through a short story I made earlier, either one of them to give me some criticism and let me know how good I actually am at writing. I feel like my friends just say great things because it's better than saying its awful. Please like or give this as much attention as possible, as I need all the criticism I get get. Thank you!
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Student from the North East of England. I love writing and want to utilise Opuss to share my short stories, imagination and ideas. All constructive criticism is accepted and valued.
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Is it possible for people to like and comment to tell me if they enjoyed my short stories. I haven't heard negative feedback yet and am still wondering. Thanks..
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I will do when I get the chance, from what I've read so far though it seems very good, the cocaine smiles one managed to make me feel very unnerved which I'm assuming was the intention!?
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