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Drowning

© ZuperZed

"Hi little brother
I've got bad news today.
Calling to tell you
that mom has gone astray."

Early that morning
my dad left for work.
All he then knew was
that she went for a walk.

Dad came home,
found a note that said:
"I love you all, even when I'm dead."

Later same evening,
the phone again was ringing.
Hope it's mom,
I want to hear her singing.

Picked up the phone,
my sister crying in the background.
Until the day I die
I'll never forget that sound.

I heard a voice saying:
"Your mom has been found."
In that very moment
my heart began to pound.

"Is someone by your side
or are you all alone?
We found your mom,
she won't be coming home."

Clothes neatly folded,
lying in the sand.
Death by drowning,
caused by her own hand.

Why did you do it?
I wish you could stay.
But you chose to end your life,
in such a selfish way!

Eight years later, I'm the one who's drowning, I'm the one astray.
Demons, shut the hell up!
Please, just go away!

ZuperZed

@ZuperZed

32 years young. Unhappily divorced. Three kids. "There are only two kinds of music: HEAVY & METAL!"

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I tried, and it probably sucks. You get the point though...

Very moving, I hope it's not a true story? It feels real!

@crowncottage I wish it wasn't but yes it is... :(

I totally can relate to this, and I think you wrote it very well. Feel for you my friend, and keep up the writing ;)

@ZuperZed so sorry xx

@Weirdwolf Thank you sir! Means a lot to hear that from a pro! ;)

@crowncottage Me too... Writing and talking about it helps a lot though!

@Weirdwolf @crowncottage Thank you both for comments and reposts! :)

@ZuperZed Oh! It's so sad.. I can't believe it's real! Bless you sir. I might be young, but I certainly know how it hurts to feel like a family member has betrayed you.. Beautiful piece, and I hope you have better fortune to come! X

Det är mycket bra skrivit! Det målar en bild så man förstår men kan ändå tolkas på eget vis och väcker mängder av känslor! Jag beklagar sanningen.....

@ZuperZed Truth can hurt. Nonetheless this is beautiful ❤

So sorry to hear this true. It's such a sad story. hugs

Powerful words, sympathies go out to you. Keep writing its excellent therapy

@ZuperZed Wow! Amazing - so sorry. I know how grief feels and that poem really describes fantastically!! x

@popia Tack så mycket! ;)

@CuriousCat @ashhkat @redfae @MrAlex @Alys124 Thank you from the bottom of my heart! That's just... overwhelming! <3

@ZuperZed No prob ;)

@ZuperZed Oh it's no problem! Words can express what lies in the very soul, it's stopped me from doing many things, so I know how you feel :) x

All the comments above apply, This is a really heartfelt poem and it comes across that way, I hope the amount of people who have liked it gives you confidence, your poetry really is great, you have a wonderful flow to your words. On a personal note I wish you all the best and hope you get through. Positivity is the key to success in my opinion. Keep up the great work.😄

@Stablish Thank you sir for these kind words :)

@ZuperZed Your most welcome😊

@ZuperZed this is very good. Your writing is raw and poignant

@ckahn Thank you! True story...

This one is just about too good!

Thank you @kivihe! blushing :)

@ZuperZed 😊😊

So emotive....I have a huge lump in my throat...epic write Hun 👏👏👏👏💚💚💚💚

@misslittleDHP Thanx again miss! Really glad you liked this one, means a lot! ;)

...and a huge thank you for reading and reposting! @misslittleDHP

@ZuperZed my pleasure Hun...magnificent 😘😘

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