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ALL TOO SIMPLE

So simple the poetry here I have read
"Laugh with me" "love with me"... Please be my friend...
If here lies the future of literature
than a very bleak future, for Opuss I'm sure
Or perhaps I am mistaken in my hypothesis
Cause there are many "likes" for "poems" like this
No thought or feelings can be detected
And every ounce of originality, neglected
But still the love flows like a river flows south
An unworthy word from an unworthy mouth
An immature quill to an unknowing well
And still the love comes, and with it heads swell
To the point that this is now all you can see

Elementary writing
Disguised as Opuss poetry

*meant towards some but surly not all.

jessep15

@jessep15

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I think you'll see there's a wide variety here.

The phrase 'people in glass houses' springs to mind 😂

I agree with @ckahn @Burrfoot there are some amazing writes here.

@Burrfoot @sammielee46 @ckahn glass houses indeed. We're not pro writers, we're people who just like to write, for fun or for whatever reason, free from judgement. Think on...

@leelee101 👏👏👏 well said honey 😘

We're all doing what we love and having fun without judgment of what we write or another's negative opinion. There are some amazing writes on here, even though we're not all pro.

Well I've just read through your back catalogue and the phrase "the pot calling the kettle black" springs to mind. And as others have said, we are all armatures here from 13 years old up, looking for fun and constructive criticism. Your 'poem' makes you seem spiteful, vindictive and judgemental.

My friend we are not trying to change the world or even your mind with our words...would you prefer Opuss was like Facebook??

Dig a little deeper and you will find some hidden jewels. Just scroll on by those that merely sparkle for fools. 😊

So I'm hearing "no being judgmental".... As you yourself judge. My poem is how I see a lot of writes here. Controversial... Sure. Provocative.... Obviously. Just realize that your defense of yourself and other in their freedom to write includes my work as well.... IF we are indeed among non judging peers. WOW. This glass house really seems crowded.

@jessep15 😂 it's a vicious circle 😂😂

@jessep15 I obv don't agree with you, there's loads of talent on here and there's also plenty of room for all levels of talent and written method of expressing it. I've read many anti tweet/quote posts, but yours is one of the rare ones that get a reaction.. Prob because it seems to lump other pieces among that looked down upon

@jessep15 I think you because you made a sweeping statement that basically you think every one on Opuss is crap, you opened yourself up to criticism.

@Burrfoot well... NOT my intent to lump... But after just reading it again I can see the reason for some reaction, made so in the last lines. But I refer to the obvious FB/Twitter stuff, as has been criticized by many. BTW. I stand by my Opuss, even though it may have been received by some badly... But I will say this... Though proven provocative, this is the most fun I've had on Opuss in a long time.

@jessep15 can I ask you in what context you mean by the word simple? Also Is your opinion that all work on Opuss is basically rubbish? And why is that? You've liked quite a number of posts, so surely you don't think they're rubbish? I'm not judging just curious!

@jessep15 I know!! A good debate is hard to beat, but gets addictive 😉 like I said, if you had said more directly that it was an anti fb/twitter rant you would have gained loads of likes etc which is what I find ironic.. Still think you're wrong though

Honestly, I agree with you. Opuss is filled with simplistic poetry. The Top Today, as an example. People are sensitive about this, but well done for speaking your mind. The Opuss Drama never ends it seems.

@sammielee46 I would say to you simple in this is meant towards those whimsical posts, that are fine BTW, but seem to generate so many likes against so many I read and myself like that, I'm sorry, are leaps and bounds more creative. Just my perception. Now in no way did I refer to ALL Opuss here as crap... Read it again... Note the words "IF" and "FUTURE".

Example: today's top Opuss.

@jessep15 you've lost me now.. The top Opuss is really very good, imaginative, descriptive, emotive, and all the more startling that it is by an 11 year old. Your judgement seems.. Lacking

It would appear Opuss is in very good hands indeed

Not the current top... I refer to one that was earlier.

Surely you realize that it has now been some time... And with that new "tops"

I find your need to rationalize for your peers lacking

@jessep15 😂 you prove my point entirely.. In your haste to judge, you miss the quality rising, which renders your assertion ridiculous. Besides the 2nd place is also not without merit. I speak for myself, not for for peers and if you invested as much time into actually reading Opuss as you have trying to justify your negative attitude towards it, you would be aware of that.

Look, this is a place for creative outlet period. We do what we do here to express, challenge ourselves and sometimes just to have fun so no doubt the posts run the gamut. I'm really wondering what your point in raising the issue was?

I only "CREATED"... This being the OUTLET!! yes? You just spoke of? I raised nothing. It was raised upon me. So my creation is within your definition of this site... Period! How about YOU let me know what I'm allowed to express... Next time. Period.

Whatever, this isn't worth my time.

I do agree that there is often an urge to supportive no matter what, here. I'm not actually opposed to that, but it does temper the praise that one may receive. Since you seem willing to provide actual criticism when warranted, I would welcome your honest opinion on my writings (acknowledging in advance that some are meant more seriously than others; if you would like me to come up with a list of my own top 20, or so, I would be perfectly willing to do so.)

@ckahn -but enough to tell us that.

@VikingHorn - you are exactly what I mean. In my opinion your words actually take me in, and I follow. I only read your top 5 but they are written with a great amount of thought and direction. You should have more recognition. Perhaps you could throw together something that uses repeating versus rhyming "me". I'm sure you can hit Top of the month.

@jessep15 I'm not terribly focused on being any top so and so, but I may follow your advice.

The backlash against this post is absolutely ironic.

@Jamtots I agree

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