Mummy

patdolan83 • 367 followers

Look at me mummy
I'm standing on my feet
I've taken my first steps
I'll soon be running free

Look at me mummy
I'm on my bicycle
My feet can finally reach the pedals
I'll soon be riding off to school

Look at me mummy
I'm making lots of friends
I've found some people just like me
Soon girls will be my trend

Look at me mummy
I'm graduating school
I've been the model straight A student
But I'll soon be breaking rules

Look at me mummy
I'm in love with a gorgeous girl
I've said those words for the very first time
And soon she'll be my world

Look at me mummy
This is my wedding day
I've found my perfect soulmate
Soon children will come our way

Look at me mummy
My life turned out so sweet
A beautiful wife and two perfect kids
Who I'd love for you to meet

Look at me mummy
I'm standing at your grave
Wishing you were there with me
To share with me these days
Wishing I could hug you
Just once for memory
You left before I knew you
Though I still miss you desperately

#emotional-journey #family-relationships #general #life-stages #memory #mother-son

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chickgamer

Jan 29, 2013 at 7:11 AM

💗👏

leelee101

Jan 29, 2013 at 7:33 AM

Poignant and brilliant in equal measures mate. 👏👏👏🍻

sleepydragon

Jan 29, 2013 at 7:37 AM

You made me cry!! How very beautiful and very sad at the end. Well done though, very clever indeed. 🌟✨🌟✨

Janflower

Jan 29, 2013 at 7:40 AM

😨😢👏👏👏

jojo72

Jan 29, 2013 at 8:33 AM

Beautiful. ❤

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:51 PM

@chickgamer 😊 thanks for the RP 😘

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:52 PM

@leelee101 cheers mate 🍺 I appreciate the kind comment and RP 👍

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:54 PM

@sleepydragon I'm glad my words touched someone, thank you for the comment 😌

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:55 PM

@Janflower glad you liked it 😊

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:55 PM

@jojo72 thank you 😊

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:56 PM

I appreciate the RP @Klaire 😘

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:56 PM

@sarahgamal thanks for the kind RP 😘

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:57 PM

@emma8899 a kind RP 😊

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:58 PM

Cheers @jackalice the RP was kind 👍👍

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 12:59 PM

@sammieelee46 thanks for the lovely RP 😘

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 1:00 PM

@KikuHonda I appreciate the RP 😊

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 1:01 PM

@Burrfoot cheers mate 🍺 for the RP

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 1:01 PM

@BethyBoo thanks for the lovely RP 😘

sjw

Jan 29, 2013 at 2:11 PM

This is awesome one of my favourites I think a brilliant poignant piece 👏👏👏😘

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 2:55 PM

@sjw so kind of you to say 😘 thanks for the RP 😊

Stablish

Jan 29, 2013 at 3:13 PM

Really great emotional write👏👏

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 4:06 PM

@Stablish cheers mate. Thanks for the RP 😊

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 4:31 PM

@LittleKitten thank you for the kind RP 😊

RandomGirl

Jan 29, 2013 at 4:35 PM

@patdolan83 no problem, beautiful write Pat😄

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 9:58 PM

@sleepydragon thanks for the kind RP 😊

tetti2

Jan 29, 2013 at 10:16 PM

Omg lump in my throat 😢beautiful write

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 10:26 PM

@tetti2 thank you for the RP and the comment 😊😘

patdolan83

Jan 29, 2013 at 11:45 PM

@carolsgregory thanks so much for the RP 😊

Hauxstar2013

Jan 30, 2013 at 2:34 AM

@patdolan83 - this is beautiful and has such a powerful ending that you can't forget and have to reread especially if you have felt that pain. I cannot think of words to praise you enough for this piece, thank you for writing this and sharing it with everyone :)